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confywrite.base.eth
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I began working on my book, *Death Is a Bully*, this week, and it's evolving into a thrilling exploration of tragedy in Raina Solomon's life. I'm still crafting the prologue, which sets a tense atmosphere. The prologue immerses readers in a dark world filled with secrets as Raina confronts the ominous presence of Death. It promises a journey into deep fears. I’d love your thoughts on: 1. Is the setting and tone engaging? 2. Are the descriptions vivid yet not overwhelming? 3. Any suggestions to enhance intrigue? Also, how do you create captivating opening scenes? What fuels your creativity in building an enthralling atmosphere? Let’s share some inspiration!
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Kent Babin
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Gave this a read! 1. Is the setting and tone engaging - the first paragraph does a good job creating atmosphere. 2. Are the descriptions vivid and not overwhelming - vivid, yes, but at times too much. You probably don't need to dedicate 5 paragraphs of description to start the book. 3. Any suggestions to enhance intrigue - most stories are character driven. Have your character do something in the 2nd or 3rd paragraph. Show her interacting with the environment or being impacted by it. 4. How do you create captivating opening scenes - usually by making the reader want to find out what happens next. Could be putting the main character in a difficult situation or having her witness something that is connected to the main plot. I'm also curious about the choice of a prologue. I've come around to the belief that they aren't necessary unless you really need to provide context via a flashback. Otherwise, I find they just get in the way.
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Kent Babin
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Should also add that I like your first sentence. It's strong and sets the tone all by itself. One thing you could do for readability is remove "and stood motionless" of rearranging the sentence to read "That might, the city stood motionless, having lost its ability to breathe."
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confywrite.base.eth
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Thank you for the feedback! I appreciate your insights. I'm currently reflecting on the prologue and its importance in setting the tone for the theme of Death. I want to ensure it contributes meaningfully to the story. If it's determined that the prologue isn't essential, I'm open to removing it and diving straight into the narrative.
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