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i will give out my total $degen allowance today for honest feedback on my latest article. What should I improve?

i will give out my total $degen allowance today for honest feedback on my latest article. What should I improve?

https://paragraph.xyz/@tomu/it-pays-to-be-onchain

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Even though I'm familiar with most of the concepts outlined in here - this was a very cool summary on what being onchain means atm! No easy task.

Here's what I loved:
+ Excellent choice of title
+ Effective use of pictures for clarity
+ Clear breakdown of different parts/mechanisms

I'm not a pro writer, but from a reader's view, here's what I'd tweak.

Enhancements:
+ Begin with a compelling introductory paragraph.
+ Strengthen the narrative flow throughout.
+ Highlight key points or ideas in bold for emphasis.

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